Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Cook A Tribble
HowTo:Cook A Tribble[edit source]
Dalboz of Gurth 22:42, July 18, 2010 (UTC)
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A big mug o' reviewin' strength tea? Why, that must mean this article is being reviewed by: UU - natter  (While you're welcome to review it as well, you might like to consider helping someone else instead). (Also, if the review hasn't been finished within 24 hours of this tag appearing, feel free to remove it or clout UU athwart the ear'ole). |
OK, this one has waited long enough. Review mode activate! --UU - natter 09:41, Aug 11
| Humour: | 7 | OK, let's get right down to brass tacks: I like this article. Positive start, huh? Well, your start is pretty good too - it piques my curiosity, it's well written, it sets up the premise well... I must admit, from the title, I wasn't expecting much, so this was a pleasant surprise, and made me want to read more.
The subsequent sections on buying, hunting and the intro to the recipes section also work well. I like the "don't be a klingon" lines, the "ch'ips" and "always pick up fewer tribbles than you need" - nice touches, and raised a chuckle. Where it fell away, for me, was at the end. The recipes are all very well, but this section feels slightly listy by its very nature, and the article seems to lack a certain amount of punch as a result. I understand that, in an article on cooking them, there need to be recipes, but perhaps you have one too many (the barbecue is boring and not really necessary). I do like the line about "a complete, yet delicious failure" in the popcorn recipe, and feel that one is the strongest. Then your serving suggestions section feels like an under-done punchline, and a weak ending, for me. I'd suggest possibly adding a section of reviews of tribble food from Trek characters, describing flavours, potential pitfalls with the meal (one under-done tribble ending up as a five-course banquet of the things, that kind of deal), that kind of thing. Also, the thought occurs that suggesting a tribble-based restaurant could be a low-cost venture for those looking to start a business - but be warned, if you endure quiet periods for too long, your stock may end up destroying the business for you. Something like that, but funnier, anyway! So, to summarise: a strong start, but finishes a little weakly. Trim a recipe, add another section afterwards, and you should have a very fine article on your hands. |
| Concept: | 7 | No problem here, a good idea, and you've done good things with it. Needs a little more expansion, as already explained, but all in all a fine job. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | Good. Well written, formatted fine in the main (I'll come to this again in the next section) and no problems at all here. Moving on, then. |
| Images: | 7 | OK, I'm not entirely fond of what you've done with the images here. The images themselves are fine (I particularly like the tribble with no hair - amusing), but the way you use them breaks up the article a little depending on screen size. Here's the suggestions:
Then you should have an article that looks more interesting and not quite so haphazard. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.3 | Averaged. Because. |
| Final Score: | 36.3 | Well, considering I see 25 as the average score, that's a very good score from me. I do like this article. I've just realised it was you who wrote Hypochondria, which I nominated for feature a long time ago, so what can I say - I like your work! I hope you'll take my points on board and make some tweaks to this article, because if you do, I think you could have another feature on your hands.
I also hope you then continue and write more stuff! I'll finish as I always do, by saying that this is only my opinion, and that others are available, and then wishing you good luck! |
| Reviewer: | --UU - natter 10:16, Aug 11
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