Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Essex High School
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Essex High School[edit source]
| Humour: | 3.5 | I really don't find anything overly funny about your high school. And this article is worse. I mean, of course you think your teachers are old, everyone in high school since, like, forever has thought that. Probably the best joke on the go is the lists that repeat themselves, but even those get old after a while. I think to make this funnier, maybe you need some anecdotes from some made-up alumni -- not just celebrities, though, actually "make up" some fictional characters. Um, like the time big, dumb Billy Gargellar drove his mom's car through the cafeteria wall? Man, those were the days.... Oh, and I'd lose at least *some* of the celeb name-dropping. How many high schools could Lindsey Lohan have gone to? Especially if she's still that dumb? |
| Concept: | 5 | Meh, I don't really care about your high school, either. At least, not any more than I cared about mine. I'm sure that would be funny to the 1600 people that attend it, but I bet only 50 or so will ever read this article as opposed to the 50 or so people that will see it on here. There you go! 50-50: 5 points. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Readable, I guess, and <ahem> both of the links worked fine. Okay, what I'm saying is don't forget to add links to your article, without them it gets pretty dead, and loses the whole 'wiki' feeling. Good job of using bold and italics, though, and the few templates aren't bad. |
| Images: | 4 | The picture of the school is appropriate, I guess, but it sure doesn't have anything remotely humourous about it. I'm thinking if you add some anecdotes or something like I mentioned earlier, it will be easier to add some more pictures that will add some more dimension to this article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | I'm giving you a six in miscellaneous, just because I like the cut of your jib. And for the phrase "Gay-Straight Alliance". That's almost an article in itself. |
| Final Score: | 24.5 | Yeah, this article really didn't do it for me. It's just bland, and while it pokes fun at your high school, it really doesn't pull off any kind of real comedy or satire. Um, hopefully you can take it a little further, whether you base it on real events that happened there, or completely fictional, uh, things. I realize that there's a {{construction}} tag on there, so hopefully you keep working at it; there is potential for an article like this to make it to a "Featured Article", but this still has a long way to go. |
| Reviewer: |  Spillin DylanTALKEDITS 03:43, Jan 22
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