Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Brick Wall!
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Brick Wall![edit source]
This is a parody of Cajek's Red Light...I think it'd help to know that before reviewing. Uh...is it any good at all? Also, if the reviewer thinks it's good enough to replace the mediocre content of Brick wall then let me know. --THE 20:24, 30 April 2008 (UTC)
lol! I'd love to review it but I am tired. Mightydandylion 
(talk) Fk 20:29, 30 April 2008 (UTC)
Huh, I'm new, and I'm gonna fuck this up, but here is what I thought of your article
| Humour: | 6 | Funny: Everything before "I'm 30 feet away." Except maybe the Pink Floyd quote, which seemed random more in a puzzling way than in a hilarious way. LOL'ed at "I showed him." Also got a kick out of describing the wall as "glistening, thick, hard." Not funny: everything after "25 feet away!", which is basically a bunch of SHIT FUCK CRAP FUCK. Maybe that's kind of funny as a parody of Red Light but it just doesn't stand on its own. The ending is also not, to me, very good. |
| Concept: | 9 | He's gonna drive into a brick wall just because he drives a fucking American car? Beauty. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Pretty good, but maybe you need to use more words to get your point across and fewer formatting changes. |
| Images: | 5 | I don't really like the giant mushroom cloud/ blood spatter stuff at the end. The one on Red Light worked; those don't. |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | For making me laugh |
| Final Score: | 36 | Rewrite the ending and tighten it all up; there's gold in here |
| Reviewer: | Hyperbole 23:47, 30 April 2008 (UTC) | |
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