Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Adware
Adware[edit source]
Well...I think it's funny.
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| Humour: | 3 | Well first off. It felt like a Wikipedia article, The beginning sentence and the application sentence feel like I'm reading something educational and there's an unnedded list in the middle. Please note that this is not Wikipedia and that Lists are unfunny and unnecessary. In fact some of the humor comes from the Adware Detection and Deletion Section which needs to be improved on. Also, the entire article is covered with Banner Ads which doesn't fit the feel of Adware. (NOTE: Adware is instrusive software designed to steal your data and make stuff like popups come out, google it sometime.) |
| Concept: | 4 | There's a concept but it's being hindered by what seems to be a joke that's been forced instead of letting it set and develop naturally. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | I can see that you already have good grammar skills, but you need to look at these to get a sense on how to truly write your potential article. |
| Images: | 2 | I'm giving you a score because the entire article is an image in itself. But next time, try to make it an animated .gif instead of taking banner ads and plastering it over a screencap of an article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 3.5 | Averaged. See blow comments. |
| Final Score: | 17.5 | Well this article didn't amuse me, it bored me. I was expecting something exciting but instead I got a dud, here's some advice on how to help your article. If you google Adware, you'll get a lot of results including the infamous Bonzai Buddy, once you got your information of spyware down and you read the featured articles to get a sense of humor, also read HTBFANJS if you haven't already. The .gif I have an idea of is a screen cap of the article and overtime it gets flooded with popups of every kind. Using the knowledge of the featured articles and adware, i'm sure that you'll create a quality article that's worth reading and laughing too. |
| Reviewer: | Uncognito 09:06, 17 February 2008 (UTC) | |
Comment: I think that's a slightly harsh review. I thought it was an amusing idea, but needed better execution, and a bit more humour in the text proper. Consider writing the article out properly, for a start - having it all as an image isn't great. Then ask someone whizzy with CSS (Eugene Kay is a good one, if you're nice to him) to help you plaster the banners over it strategically for a similar effect. There does need to be a few more jokes in the text as well - to stop the article being a one-trick pony. What you have here, I'd say, is not a bad idea, but one that's in need of more work. So don't be disheartened! If you want some specific ideas for adding funny to the text, give me a shout on my talk page, I'll try to give you a few. --SirU.U.Esq. VFH | GUN | Natter | Uh oh | Pee 09:36, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
- You're right, I'll try to be less harsher next time. --Uncognito 09:39, 17 February 2008 (UTC)