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From Pee Review[edit source]
Look at it. I made it in only a few minutes. --emc! ╬ 03:36, 19 June 2006 (UTC)
Looks good. In my opinion it needs expansion and detail. It appears to be of the "intentionally preposterous" satirical class. As such, I would welcome a stronger plot flow and clearer logic.
- The pilgrims boarding the Mayflower in 1934...well, the reader is left hanging because Pilgrims arriving in America in 1934 would have met the Civilian Conservation Corps and not the native Americans. Also, it doesn't fit in with the Mayflower being killing "192,230 people before World War II".
- Why do the pilgrims need to have "Borg technology"? It doesn't figure into the article anywhere.
- Minor point: the Mayflower did not "settle on the new land" unless it was hauled ashore... :)
Just my opinion: Better consistency and logical plot elements are in order. ----OEJ 19:09, 19 June 2006 (UTC)
Could probably do with a little less randomness and a little more satire- it has got potential as it is, but there's the capacity here for some more cutting jokes about American settlers, their treatment of the native Americans being a particularly rich mine of humour --Jamtrousers 13:17, 20 June 2006 (UTC)