Talk:Hyper Bole
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From Pee Review[edit source]
Here lies my second stab at an article. -TKF 19:02, 1 April 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 6.1 | Bonus .1 is for the Colgate Raiders. You could go into a little more depth with the two boles, make the hyPERbuhlees a little sharper... |
| Concept: | 8 | Cheesy and easy but it works. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | As with humour, make the hyPERbuhlees a little clearer. Your prose doesn't flow as well as it could, especially in the final paragraph. |
| Images: | 4 | The ones you have are okay, but maybe Photoshop up some helmets facing each other like they do on the tee-vee or some other depiction of the hyperbole teams. More imagery that fits the article's theme is necessary. That is to say, more hyperbolic imagery. |
| Miscellaneous: | 4 | The article could have more clarity and depth. The last section in particular. |
| Final Score: | 27.1 | You've managed to not run the hyPERbuhlee joke into the ground, and that's good, but it needs to be more than hyPERbuhlee. This might give the article a little more flow. Throw in some more funny and some appropriate pics and it's even better. Not an expert reviewer, but I hope that helps. |
| Reviewer: | (Gir. 04:27, 2 April 2007 (UTC)) | |
Thanks for the help, I'll see what I can do with it (when I get the chance -_-) - --TKF 14:19, 2 April 2007 (UTC)