Talk:Baby Fu

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I'm working up the nerve to self-nom another of my works, and this is an old QFH from days of yore. I'm curious if it's got what it takes in the new VFH...--<<>> 18:59, 5 February 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	7	The article combines overexerted martial arts mysticism with the hassle of feeding a baby, but the first takes too big a role; you should try balancing in a bit more of the baby-feeding part.
Concept:	10	This concept has humongeous potential. If you improve it, this is for the win.
Prose and formatting:	7	Good writing, the martial arts mysticism is especially nice. The overuse of short categories is a bit annoying though. Switch to a bullet list or flesh them out more.
Images:	9	No complaints here.
Miscellaneous:	7	Another minor point, maybe the humour in the article is a bit too self-referring in the latter part?
Final Score:	40	If I where you, I'd put in a bit more effort to rework it before VHF'ing it again, or else it will probably loose.
Reviewer:	--TheTerrorThatIsSkaPunk 13:23, 19 February 2007 (UTC)TheTerrorThatIsSkaPunk, 14:26, 19 Februari 2007

I'm gonna ask the (pregnant with third child) girlfriend for advice on this one. Don't forget "one for daddy, one for the floor, one for the cat, one for baby" move on the part of one's opponent - David Gerard 11:51, 6 February 2007 (UTC)

Heh, I'll have to figure out a way to work that one in... thanks.--<<>> 16:38, 6 February 2007 (UTC)