HowTo talk:Frighten small children
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A swarm of candy!!!
A swarm of erasers!!!
A swarm of scissors!!!
A swarm of snakes!!!
A swarm of pretzels!!!
A swarm of mommy's medicine!!!
A swarm of golf balls!!!
A swarm of daddy's ammo!!!
A swarm of crocodiles!!!
And a swarm of marbles!!!
Criticisms (negative)
- Starting with that huge pic is too much, scale it down. Also, scale down the other large pics.
- Doesn't "feel" like a How-to. I don't feel like I can "learn how to scare small children from this"
- Writing style is meandering
- Overall, it's not very funny.
I would need to spend considerable time editing it to my liking, but as I said, the idea is sound. Hope this helps. Cheers! Rev. Zim_ulator (Talk) I am the dirt under your rollers 18:25, July 25, 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks. Downsized the opening pic and put it into the text. Sameified the writing style and added to it. The closing pics should be kept large, imnho, as the first one, the spiderz, is the point of the page. It looks real and not photoshopped, and if so, that's a place I don't want to visit. Aleister 19:18 25 7
- p.s. Thanks for your advice though, here's a gift for helping:
- The first pic is freakin' scary! I guess everybody would have died of a heart attack had it been bigger! Great article! Mattsnow 12:15, May 7, 2011 (UTC)
- p.s. Thanks for your advice though, here's a gift for helping: