User talk:Syndrome/Archery
A few edits[edit source]
When you started editing this article, I couldn't relate to it and backed away. Now that I've seen what you've done, I like it. (I think I said that before, but it bears repeating). I suppose any edits we do to this thing should be very small. It's got six votes so far, and I don't want to jinx that.
I made a few changes, mostly grammar and changing a word here and there and adding links to paragraphs that were linkless. Personally I don't get the opening quote, but as our voters have already seen it, I suppose we should keep it. I put the I SUCKED HIS COCK in small as I think that works better (the bigger size to me is a little much as we've been sort of subtle through the article.) Let me know what you think. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 03:09, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Making it small is fine. I'll go ahead and make the whole sentence small, because right now it looks like, well, smallcaps like a title or something.
- Why did you remove the part about the William Tell act? I think it's important that we tell the readers why there's sobbing, and Olympic archers probably don't casually miss and hit people every day. I suppose that line needs reworking, so there's not too much of a discrepancy between being a very skilled archer and hitting someone. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 03:51, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Also, FYI, I had originally changed V to IX because V looks too much like V. X is better than V when it comes to reading, although it's a little hard to believe. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 04:02, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Originally when I used Rod N. Pance (nunber), it was a reference to the prison guard Rod N. Pance who discovered the Sun Bee painting in Folsom, California (the Clovis people really were discovered near Folsom, Arizona, but I moved it for the prison). Later I changed the original Pance to a high school coach, and Folsom back to Arizona. Maybe we could make this one III or IV, I don't care. Yeah, X is stretching it a bit. As for Willian Tell, he was known for accuracy (shooting an arrow off his son's head), not distance shooting. I think it's funny, but will change Olympic archer to Olympic-quality archer as you don't shoot apples off kids' head in the Olympics. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 04:50, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- I made a few small edits, so see what you think. I didn't get the William Tell joke the first couple times I read the article because it mentioned the Olympics and I was thinking of an Olympics archery competition--this could happen to other readers as well. So I changed it to "greatest archers of today...." See what you think. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 05:05, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Don't be afraid to add a new section if you want. It's userspace, after all. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 21:40, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- We've got 6 for votes and no against and the changes we've made are relatively small. If we make major changes and want to copy this to mainspace, we'll be faced with either asking for it to be withdrawn from nomination, or making major changes and hoping we don't get blocked. Unless you object, I suggest we copy this onto the main article (whichever one of us does it can put a note that edits have been done by both). What think? (Oh, and let's not forget to put the VFH template at top when we move it). King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 22:52, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Done. I also added Category:Sports because I realized we didn't have any categories. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 23:28, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Good. I didn't even think about the categories; glad you did. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 23:52, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Done. I also added Category:Sports because I realized we didn't have any categories. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 23:28, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- We've got 6 for votes and no against and the changes we've made are relatively small. If we make major changes and want to copy this to mainspace, we'll be faced with either asking for it to be withdrawn from nomination, or making major changes and hoping we don't get blocked. Unless you object, I suggest we copy this onto the main article (whichever one of us does it can put a note that edits have been done by both). What think? (Oh, and let's not forget to put the VFH template at top when we move it). King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 22:52, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Don't be afraid to add a new section if you want. It's userspace, after all. --Pleb SYNDROME CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!) 21:40, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- I made a few small edits, so see what you think. I didn't get the William Tell joke the first couple times I read the article because it mentioned the Olympics and I was thinking of an Olympics archery competition--this could happen to other readers as well. So I changed it to "greatest archers of today...." See what you think. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 05:05, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
- Originally when I used Rod N. Pance (nunber), it was a reference to the prison guard Rod N. Pance who discovered the Sun Bee painting in Folsom, California (the Clovis people really were discovered near Folsom, Arizona, but I moved it for the prison). Later I changed the original Pance to a high school coach, and Folsom back to Arizona. Maybe we could make this one III or IV, I don't care. Yeah, X is stretching it a bit. As for Willian Tell, he was known for accuracy (shooting an arrow off his son's head), not distance shooting. I think it's funny, but will change Olympic archer to Olympic-quality archer as you don't shoot apples off kids' head in the Olympics. King of the Internet Alden Loveshade??? (royal court) 04:50, October 13, 2009 (UTC)