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It failed on VFH with 23 for votes, so I wanna get the little boosts that could push it up to a feature. Don Puttano cHeDDs 23:18,10June,2009 23:18, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

If I can make two suggestions, keep the tone consistent throughout the piece (it starts off one way, and by the time you finish up the creature section it's going another way), and abstain from excessive whoring, and you should be golden. —Unführer Guildy Ritter von Guildensternenstein 14:34, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

I did abstain from excessive whoring this time. I didn't whore until about 25 days into it, when I only needed about one or two points to secure a feature (I didn't get 1 or 2 points). And what do you mean about the tone? Don Puttano cHeDDs 16:43,12June,2009

Oh and sorry about the misspelling of again. Don Puttano cHeDDs 02:24,17June,2009

I've tried but I can't do it - something about this article just rubs me the wrong way - you have a fantastic character in the leprechaun and then you throw in all this militaristic stuff. Without a major re-write there is nothing in this article that has any redeeming features for me. It's VFH failed twice, but close each time... I'd suggest the best is to walk away from it head held high and leave it for a month and come back and re-write it with a fresh head. I'd see if someone who abstained or voted "For" is willing to PeeReview. I'm sorry, but I really did try... Pup

That's okay. Just put the gun down. Yeah, i think I'm gonna do a re-write soon, at least for the military stuff which every one hates. Like maybe the last 2-3 sections. Don Puttano cHeDDs 16:39,29June,2009

You know what, I think I know what I need to do, and I don't want to waste a reviewer's time. Can someone tell me how to take this off PR? (tell me not do it for me so I know) Don Puttano cHeDDs 21:41,30June,2009

Sorry, did it and then read the stuff in parenthesis... Pup

Humour:	0
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Final Score:	0	Removed as per submitters request
Reviewer:	Pup