Why? talk:Hunt Unicorns
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Pee Review[edit source]
If you're interested, you should add a link to my old penicorn article. I won't do it because it's your article and your decision, but hey. User:Mrthejazz/sig 20:07, 8 December 2007 (UTC)
| link | score /50 | user | lowest score | date | comment |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns | 36 | UnderUser | Miscellaneous: 5 | 9/26 | longer paragraphs, longer intro, longer. |
| Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Why?:Hunt Unicorns | 43 | I like cheese | Prose: 6 | 10/28 | |
| avg 39.5 --- lowest 5.5 | |||||
| Humour: | 7 | I quite enjoyed this. That's a reserved British expression of praise, you know. |
| Concept: | 9 | Definitely has the originality thing going for it. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | In the main, pretty good. Maybe the odd tweak needed, and possibly some variety. |
| Images: | 7 | No problems there, it has images, they are relevant. Job done. I suppose an image of a Unicorn hunt in action would be handy, but that depends on your skills. Maybe a unicorn in a crosshair? Or in an explosion? Or in an SUV? (Sorry, got carried away). |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | You're right, it has promise. Significant promise, in my eyes. But I think it needs more. Oh shit, now I have to justify that. Er... |
| Final Score: | 36 | Keep pushing, I sense there's more you can get from this. And looking at the history, it seems you're already working on it! See handful of comments below. |
| Reviewer: | --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 13:07, 26 September 2007 (UTC) | |
Either a longer intro, or a decent sized paragraph before the "Dear God Why?" section might be handy. Maybe a word from an organisation like the Democratic Unicorn Hunt or similar, explaining their desire to increase participation in Unicorn hunting?
Basically, just adding something that gives a bit of variety might help - it feels a bit... listy, to me, and breaking that up with a paragraph or two might make a difference.
Alternatively, ignore that advice and keep going, you seem to be doing just fine so far. I look forward to seeing this when you're a bit further down the line with it.
As always, this is just my opinion. Others are available. --Sir Under User (Hi, How Are You?) VFH KUN 13:07, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | Great on the begining, but a bit more needed on the lists. |
| Concept: | 10 | Ha HA Amazing Where did you get that idea? |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Weakest point in the article, needs a few checks on spelling and grammar. |
| Images: | 9 | Brilliant. Pink unicorn needs a caption though |
| Miscellaneous: | 10 | (Extra Points for the tumbleweed at the end) |
| Final Score: | 43 | Amazing. Clean up the grammer and It could be featured. Really. |
| Reviewer: | --I like cheese 20:53, 28 October 2007 (UTC) | |