User talk:DJ Irreverent/UnNews:Ice age end, Tribe get hot; All confused.

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Humour:	7	This is funny, but it didn't make me laugh out loud. Caveman being confused about the Ice Age ending is very fun to watch and overexagerating on what the effects will be. It needs to be clearer that they are in a panic though.
Concept:	8	I see what you are going here. You're using the only thing that can cause greenhouse gasses at the time. Fire as a metaphor of how life will be once global warming actually happens. It's a good concept. I'll give you that.
Prose and formatting:	7	I see no problems with your writing and I like that you're going for a style that's written by a caveman. But as I said in the humor section, try to make it clear that they're in a panic.
Images:	2	What? No images. I want to see what's going on, not imagine what's going to happen. But please, when you get the change. Please add some images.
Miscellaneous:	6	Averaged.
Final Score:	30	This is a good idea and with work. It could become an even better idea, but I felt confused as some places were out of place such as the personal commentary, the slightly intelligent acronyms, and the references to TV shows that are in the future like Sienfeld. It makes it feel place where a world is still growing by leaps and bounds. I was disappointed by the lack of images, but as time goes by. I'm sure that you'll be able to describe the article excellently with pictures, like the Ice Age happening. My main advice, if you try to look like it's from the past instead of mixing in current refrences with the past. Then I'm sure that you'll have a pretty great article.
Reviewer:	Nekami 14:10, 3 March 2008 (UTC)