User talk:Chompy/Toucan Sam

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This is my first "created" article and I would appreciate any suggestions or contributions to it. I don't have any pics up because I don't have any good image-editing software.

--Chompy 20:32, 28 December 2006 (UTC)

It's too random.--Nydas 15:18, 29 December 2006 (UTC)

I agree with Nydas, the piece is currently rather random. It's underdeveloped. However, revision could cure that. For instance, the link between rainforest degradation and Toucan Sam falling into the clutches of commercialized exploitation is not well-developed and so it seems random. Think about the mythology of "primitive innocence in a primeval rainforest" being invaded by the "bulldozers of exploitation", resulting in a "flight (of the toucan) to the slums of Hollywood" where advertising pimps, cereal junkies, and beak-snatchers rule the roost... Anyway, revise. You've only done 4 online revisions, so the piece is very young.----OEJ 20:09, 1 January 2007 (UTC)

If you are in need of an excellent piece of imaging editing software check out The GIMP --The Rt. Hon. BarryC MUN (Symposium!) Sigh. Double Sigh. 20:59, 1 January 2007 (UTC)