User:Shabidoo/happymonkeycompetition/2013/Sir Peasewhizz

Pee Review from Shabidoo

Creativity:	9/10	Very high on the creative side. No complaints there at all. Very well done.
Originality:	6.5/10	Okay...this is pretty off the wall...which is a good thing. It goes from a personal diary to counting off a tale to a public service announcement and a youtube video thrown in for good effect. I saw a few of the same patterns of articles (re: insulting the reader, the character is a douche) but I still haven't read anything quite like it. There are so many places you could go like ditching a house in a completely different setting (knocking on the door of a make shift tent in a refugee camp or doing it while you dreamed to terrorise the person re: nightmare on elm street). The youtube image is a funny one, but it seems a little like the article is written to fit the gif rather than the other way around.
Humour:	7/10	This part of the contest is pretty subjective. There are funny moments...though there was little build up to any jokes so I didn't LOL. But in any case...there is still a decent level of humour for only one day of writing.
Final Score:	22.5/30	Over all a pretty solid and good article for 24 hours of writing. NICE!

Pee Review from ¡¡¡Y¡¡¡

Creativity:	7/10	.
Originality:	6/10	.
Humour:	9/10	.
Final Score:	22/30	Good. I like the style but could've been a bit longer. Good job!

Pee Review from Multiliteralist

Creativity:	8/10	.
Originality:	7/10	On this particular subject it might be original, but I've seen the format elsewhere.
Humour:	7/10	Check your delivery. Points off because of the underlining of your nihilistic point. Let the readers think for themselves.
Final Score:	22/30	Not bad at all. The outcome far too unlikely to be truly funny, but the nihilism makes up for that.

Score and comments by Sarah Baldewijns
Score	Comment
8,5/10	Pretty cool and funny. For me the picture of the house was even funnier than the video at the end.

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