User:Shabidoo/happymonkeycompetition/2011/Socky
Happy Monkey Competition Winter 2011
Pee reviews for: User:Sockpuppet of an unregistered user
Article: Motorized Shopping Cart
Pee Review from Shabidoo
| Humo(u)r: | 9/10 |
Very funny through out the article. Heres a run by of the funny moments for me. The minishing the way of the future made me LOL. By the "but why" section I was cracking up. It wains a bit in "hey werent you dead" but in the last paragraph, its one of the first times I have ever seen shut-up used in a really funny way. The way of the future gets a little repetitive but in anycase, very funny short article. |
| Creativity: | 8/10 |
I give high creativity marks for individual elements rather than for the article over all. Way of the future diminishing. The concept of the author "making something the way of the future" the creative use of links. |
| Images: | 5/10 |
Theres only one image. Its a good one and fits in really well with the article, would have been nice to have a chopped one or an assortment of them. |
| Prose, Formatting, Links: | 4/5 |
Really well written, sorted out in good colums, though only a few links and a little short. |
| Concept or whatever you want to put here: | 3/5 |
The concept seems clear, as for any short article but it is a little confusing at the end what you are trying to do and obviously needs expansion. |
| Final Score: | 29/40 |
I can't really suggest much as we both know everything needs expansion, more images, a clearer concept and polishing. As its clearly your style and that probably there are things going around in your mind nothing really pops out for me to suggest except expand, image, links, concept. Its clear we will have an awsome article. Short but very good job for 24 hours. |
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Pee Review from: Fudgemobile
| Humo(u)r: | 9/10 |
(9/10) Very funny, needed to be stretched out a bit though. |
| Creativity: | 8/10 |
(8/10) Very creative, loved it. |
| Images: | 8/10 |
(8/10) Was the image altered? Anyways, it fits in with the article but I would like to see more pictures. |
| Prose, Formatting, Links: | 1/5 |
(1/5) There was only one link in the bulk of the article, the rest were in the introduction. |
| Concept or whatever you want to put here: | 5/5 |
(5/5) Very good buyer-seller take on this article. |
| Final Score: | 31/40 |
(31/40) |
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