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Yellow Poverty

-- MagicBus Hello? Is there anybody there? 20:46, 14 June 2013 (UTC)

Humour:	5.5	Bland. Didn't quite find the funny. The only humourous bit is Cooper's dismemberment. I'm hardly a person you'd listen to but here are some suggestions anyway. Introduction: Deserves an expansion The Early Life: Break it into Inception (not the movie) and Early Years. Shift the current content under Inception. Add new content under Early Years, emphasising, perhaps, on how Maurice Cooper got on Tommy's nerves with his habits. Somewhere in the Middle: Add a paragraph on the album, Yellow Poverty. Maybe include release, label, reception, fans' reaction, band members' reaction, what The Queen had to say about it... Include some information on why Tommy Roberts spent 2015-2020 idly. Or on what he did for those five years. Did he try to perform solo and failed? Did he prefer to fap at home? Did he receive a giant pack of M&Ms that kept him busy? Fix: You have mentioned the band's name change twice, in Introduction as well as Early Life. Preferably, change the Introduction bit. As it is it needs work.
Concept:	6	Weird but nice. I have little to say in this regard. Picking up such a random concept and doing it justice is quite a challenge, even for writers such as yourself. I think I have reviewed a couple of your articles before, so I know you write well.
Prose and formatting:	9	Pretty. Whatever is there, is neat, organised, ordered, and similar good things. The article looks nice.
Images:	6	Dinosaur. The pictures that are there are okay, but the High School Musical 3 walla picture looks out of place w.r.t. the caption. Once again, I have suggestions. Album cover of Yellow Poverty On the HSM-3 poster, remove the HSM 3 logo and add Yellow Poverty instead. All you need is Paint. With new sections come new images. Photoshopped picture of a girl with a fish - Jessica Davies with her bass.
Miscellaneous:	6	Averaged your score. Here are some more suggestions on new sections you could add. Popularity (local and international) Future projects See Also
Final Score:	32.5	I realise I have made too many suggestions. Anyway, go ahead and work on the article if you will (it does need work). Have fun.
Reviewer:	Tumb13weed (talk) 20:49, 30 June 2013 (UTC)