Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnScripts:The Rapid And The Ragey

Nameable 18:12, 19 April 2009 (UTC)

Humour:	6	I was hooked instantly. Scenes 1 and 2 got some hefty chuckles out of me. Around scene 5 I really started to lose interest, and it all ends very randomly. I thought the beginning of the article where you played up the stupidity of the film series was great, I just wish it stayed consistent throughout the article. I would have liked to see it end coherently, and every bit as crappy, cheesy, and as hollywood-y as the original movies it parodies.
Concept:	7	The concept is good and the poster image is spot-on. However, the article peters out after scene 3, and overall feels unfinished to me. It needs to be expanded and re written towards the end. Try to stick to the campy tone that it has in the beginning all the way through. I thought scene 2 was especially funny and I was disappointed when the rest of the article strayed away from the concept tone set up until that point.
Prose and formatting:	8	Formatting is excellent, great use of bold and italic text, indenting and asides just like a real script. Cool.
Images:	3	There's only one. It's a good one, I'll give you that, but it definitely needs at least 2 more to fit with the length of the article.
Miscellaneous:	5	I liked your use of the camera direction and the acting descriptions were pretty funny - I just don't understand the ending, you lost me somewhere.
Final Score:	29	Overall not a bad piece! With a little more work I think you can make this a lot better.
Reviewer:	~Formerly Annoying Crap 02:47, 15 May 2009

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