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UnNews:Sex and the City Movie being remade

Blammo77 07:16, 12 June 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	3	I am going to be very serious, there is no humour in this article at all, absolutely nothing funny about… anything written in here. For starters, this article doesn’t even seem to have a solid concept behind it, and frankly, why does Rob Zombie want to remake Sex and the City? What you could do here is expand the sentences a bit, adding in detail to ‘’make it funny’’. As an example, “Renowned director Rob Zombie is remaking "Sex and the City: The Movie".” Could become “Renowned movie eater, Rob Zombie, is touching “Sex and The City: The Movie” in the strange way he has touched every other movie.” That last sentence takes advantage of the fact Rob Zombie does horror films, and the fact that Sex and the City is more of a sitcom film. While I understand that you are new to Uncyclopedia, I am not holding it against you. Humour is a VERY hard thing to get down completely. I would recommend reading HTBFANJS to get a grasp on how to make a funny article.
Concept:	4	As I said in humour, the concept behind this article is hardly exploited. While I understand that Rob Zombie is remaking a recent release, and he is doing the remake because “He just wants to reimagine it, ya know? it doesn’t tell enough about what the remake will expect, what Rob is going to do with the film, it is instead presented as a serious, non-humourous, straight-faced article. To expand on this concept, think about what would make you laugh while remaking this article. To paraphrase HTBFANJS, truth is funnier then fiction. Lie to the audience in a dramatic way to make the lie big enough to laugh at.
Prose and formatting:	6	Your prose was, admissibly, not bad. You had solid sentences, and there were absolutely no fragments, but work still has to be done here. To improve this article, you can add links using [[ ]] around the word you want to link to. If you feel like getting saucy, add a
Images:	0	Try though I might, I plain and simply can not give a score for images if there are no images. If you need help with an image, look in here or request one here. You can also look up “Sex and the City” on Google, get an image from there, and upload it to Uncyclopedia. To place the image in the article, use this template, [[Image:ImageName.FileFormat|Text]]
Miscellaneous:	3.2	Avg'd as per Pee Review guidelines
Final Score:	16.2	At the moment, this article is VFD fodder, and could use quite a bit of work. Here is what you need to work on Read HTBFANJS, and don’t be afraid to elaborate on the jokes in the article News articles pay attention to detail, and are harder than conventional articles. For that reason, you might want to look at some of the highlight UnNews article to get some ideas as to how to expand. Nail out the concept a bit, tell us who, what, where, when, and why. Upload and place an image Add another paragraph or two Add some categories and links, using the provided code I know this looks like a lot, and I understand that it may take a while to get humour down, but keep working, don’t give up, and good luck!
Reviewer:	Warm Regards, ▀ĴαVắśСąР▀15:34 June 12 2008