Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnNews:Scientist disappointed to find cure for cancer (2)
UnNews:Scientist disappointed to find cure for cancer [edit source]
Second review. I would like this in-depth, so could maybe a steel kidney get in here? Staircase CUNt 00:54, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
- On second thought, I'll take anyone. Just get a review going here, please. Staircase CUNt 20:11, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
Do not fear, I got this one. It's Me Bitches! Don't worry, I won't kill you.
| Humour: | 5.5 | The humor in this article was okay. A couple things that made me smile. It was definitely creative, if there's one thing I can tell you! But I can tell you more, so here goes.
The intro was on point, with a joke I liked, as well as some well placed data that really helped tell your story. The next part, not so much. The nudie party wasn't that funny. It was executed decently, but not a funny idea. Also, druggie jokes are (usually) not funny. It wasn't a good idea for him to get upset over losing his marijuana money, which brings me to my next issue. With many different reasons to get upset about losing useful money for cancer, and all of them written equally, the article has many concepts. This, in an Uncyclopedia article, is like a split personality, which is not good. The one I liked was the one about women, I thought that was funny, and expandable. That was probably my favorite bit, besides the ending, which was hilarious. Also, the footnotes weren't funny. |
| Concept: | 7.5 | Scientists being dissapointed with finding what they've looked for for years. I absolutely LOVE IT! The execution wasn't all the way there, though. I really think that some parts were unneccesary and could have been left out. Things like the "complete accident" part are unfunny and the article could go without them. I'm trying to be brief here, so I'm going to close this out by summing it up with:
Love the idea, Could've had better execution. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Nothing really to complain about here, I did see one comma that was left out, and a couple unneeded spaces here and there, but I already fixed those, so you don't have to worry about any of that. The article's length is solid, and the paragraphs, grammar, and the overall presentation of the article were good. I'm not the most vigilant reader, so if you could copy/paste it into Microsoft Word, that would be good, because there were spelling and grammar mistakes that I probably didn't catch. |
| Images: | 3 | You have one image, and it's pretty random. It doesn't fit extremely well, and it is not very relevant, and the caption is not the best either. Making it less random, and quite possibly slapping a couple more on there too, would help. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5.5 | Averaged via the pee template. |
| Final Score: | 27.5 | You've done a good job on this, Steppy. As it stands it is a solid news article, but has the potential to be featured. Good luck! |
| Reviewer: | It's Me Bitches! Don't worry, I won't kill you. | |