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Reviewed twice. It needs more tweaking, however. Please include detailed advice in your review.   Le Cejak • <-> 23:54, Nov 13 Alright, let's do this! -Razorflame (contributions) Talk 04:12, 15 November 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	8.8	*Intro(7)-Feels like it's lacking humour from my standpoint, but I know that you would rather hear that it is funny, which I think it is in one light, but not the other. I think you need to rework this intro to make it understandable to us normal users. Step 1:Part 1(10)-This was actually funny! Kudos! Step 1:Part 2(9)-Humour was there, but a little dry for my tastes. Maybe fix this up a little? Step 1:Part 3(10)-Nothing needs to be changed here. Funny. Step 2:Part 1(6)-This did not feel funny at all. Change this please and make it more funny. Maybe add some more word play? Step 2:Part 2(7)-This did not feel funny at all. Change this please and make it more funny. Maybe add some more word play? Exact same as the last one. Step 2:Part 3(10)-There you go! You finally did it right! Step 3(9)-Funny up until the last bolded heading. Then, it gets a little unfunny. Otherwise, good part. Step 4(9)-Funny in a WTF? kind of way. The last part, with the list, is funny, but I think you should revert the list into paragraph form. You should also move the template to the top of the article.
Concept:	10	Original concept that is fully fleshed out. Enough said.
Prose and formatting:	9	Near perfect grammar and formatting. Just a little typo here and there, otherwise, perfect.
Images:	10	Images that actually have humourous captions. Astounding!
Miscellaneous:	9.5	Average of the other 4 scores.
Final Score:	47.3	Fix what I've said above. Otherwise, good article!
Reviewer:	-Razorflame (contributions) Talk 04:25, 15 November 2007 (UTC)