Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Obi-Wan Kenobi
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Obi-Wan Kenobi[edit source]
Matfen 23:03, November 7, 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | There is some great humour in the article. In particular, I liked the recurring theme of Obi-Wan's bad sense of humour. However, there are also large sections where I was a little bored, and waiting for the next gag. I think this could be greatly improved by concentrating your efforts on Obi-Wan and his situations, rather than other characters. |
| Concept: | 6 | I think there is always great potential in an article about a major character in a popular media franchise. However, I have the same problem with the tone that I did with the humour. That being that it article spends too much time explaining events of the Star Wars movies rather being about the character himself. Perhaps it would be a better to focus more on Obi-Wan's own characteristics and his relationships with other characters. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | There do seem to be a large quantity of long sentences and rather a lack of short sentences between. It is often a good idea place a short snappy sentence here and there to keep the reader from losing interest. |
| Images: | 6 | The images are mostly relevant, until you get to the section on "Revenge of The Sith" where they tend to be of other characters with litle reference to the subject matter. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5.5 | Averaged using Template:Pee |
| Final Score: | 27.5 | I can see that a lot of effort has gone into this and it is to be commended. However, it feels more like a plot summary of the Star Wars movies rather than an article on Obi-Wan Kenobi. |
| Reviewer: | SuperBario 02:13, November 8, 2009 (UTC) | |