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Interpretive Dance[edit source]
Tkotse 21:10, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | A witty introduction is followed with the occasional flash of clever language, and the mocking tone is good throughout. Perhaps the article might have benefited from an extension to the parodying description encountered in the 'OH FUCK OFF' section, and an exploration into other nationalities, extended from the Germany comments in the intro, would have been a good divergence. |
| Concept: | 5 | The concept, in essence, is good, and much more content could certainly be generated from it. The only thing I would say is that there does not appear to be a link between the first section of the article, and the second. Maybe there are two concepts here? The complete change of tack disrupts the flow a little, but in essence it is a comical framework with much potential. |
| Prose and formatting: | 4 | There is just a slight lack of content here, if I'm honest. The good thing is, there is room for more, and I am sure there is a lot more you could say. It is well-formatted in a basic sense, there is a concise introduction, and paragrpah headings. Perhaps the fall down is that the second half tends to get more list-like, and paragraphs are thrown in where really, a new graphic or simply punctuation could make the whole thing flow. There is prose there, but perhaps it is borderline, and maybe some sort of timeline-style section would fit the purpose and context of the article, just as a suggestion. |
| Images: | 4 | There is a noticeable animation that brings a wry smile to the face, and a good photo of Ricky Gervais, with an amusing caption, although perhaps one or two more pictures, relating to other paragraphs within the article, would have made it better overall, and more readable. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | The 'today' paragraph brought laughter to me, I wonder if you have any more one-liners, or quotes on the subject that you could work to a humorous advantage? The length is reasonably good for a work that shows potential, and could certainly be made very good with some improvement. Nice to see lots of blue links, and no red. |
| Final Score: | 26 | Lots of potential in this subject, and indeed can link in with many other pages. Keep at it, couple more pictures, maybe a bit more synthesis, and I reckon you will have cracked this page. |
| Reviewer: | J Harrison Jackharrison 14:27, 4 April 2008 (UTC) | |