Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Crowd Surf

Jonjammin 00:24, 13 May 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	5	I love the concept of this article. It does seem a bit rushed though. You might want to give some descriptive examples of what has happened to those in the past that didn't follow certain instructions. For example: an obviously green surfer was roughing up the crowd at Warped Tour. He kicked a me square in the face (almost breaking my glasses) and kicked another gentleman in the back of his head. We reached up between the surfer's legs and spiked him into the concrete, where he was stomped by the crowd he pissed off. Letting people know exactly what may happen to rule breakers when they turn on their wave might add the extra humor this article needs. Misfortune = Funny
Concept:	8.5	As stated above, I really like the concept of this article. Once you get it where you think it is complete, I will be sure to recommend it.
Prose and formatting:	6.5	As stated above, it did feel a little bit rushed. There were a few grammatical errors I noticed but nothing major, but I'm not one to be criticizing anyone's editing as I generally have tons of help.
Images:	7	Nothing really to comment on. They were what I expected to get.
Miscellaneous:	6.75	averaged
Final Score:	33.75	I hope you continue working on this article. I think it has a great amount of potential but just isn't quite there yet.
Reviewer:	--Cheapinitreal 07:35, 13 May 2008 (UTC)

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