Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Hovercars (2nd Review)

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Hovercars [edit source]

Last of my first three articles to be finished up. Any ideas on how to improve this would be great! Thanks!

Tagstit 07:11, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Dude, Projectjulio, stop posting stuff, you already did the first one and I respect your view, stop trying to force it on me. I will make the changes based on the next opinion and yours. Thanks --Tagstit 00:10, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

Humour: 8 Very funny and colloquial. You write out the part for 'desperate car salesman' very well haha. However, it really hasn't got much to do with actual hovercars, (fake) information-wise, at least. Perhaps 'How to:Talk like a Desperate Salesman' or something of the like would be more fitting haha. Very funny, though, don't get me wrong.
Concept: 7 Good idea, but again, you really don't talk about hovercars, which is sort of a problem when your article is called 'hovercars'.
Prose and formatting: 9 Excellent for the most part, especially when you italicize certain words for stress/emphasis etc. However, you may want to re-read as a comma here and there would be useful.
Images: 7 Good, appropriate images with fairly funny captions that actually have something to do with the article. Solid stuff.
Miscellaneous: 7 Rounds out the score. Solid, but not spectacular.
Final Score: 38 A very good article. Judging from this and your other work, you're very fitting of Noob of the Month. Speaking of, I myself am new here, and if you could review my two articles and nominate me for NotM, I would greatly appreciate it. I mean, don't feel obligated or anything, but it would be pretty cool, ya know? Dude, seriously, nominate me. This is all I've got going right now. Please. Please, man, ya fuckin' gotta help me out here. *pulls out gun* Look, man, shit's gonna go down if you don't review my fucking shit, so just...just do it, OK? *freaked-out look with gun in hand*
Reviewer: Guildensternenstein