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Fisherism[edit source]
I'd appreciate someone reviewing this article. Its a short read, and I do plan to expand, but I'd really like feedback on what I've done and where I need to improve. Thanks.
Rbpolsen ♦ Come Rant · Come Look at all My Crap 21:04, June 10, 2010 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | The end paragraph is funny. But the first one is confusing. Possibly make them into more paragraphs? I found myself getting lost. |
| Concept: | 8 | Its a funny concept. I like the idea of him discovering it whilst near a "pee stream" |
| Prose and formatting: | 2 | You really need to correct your structure. Try adding another heading at the second paragraph and making the first paragraph a little less confusing. |
| Images: | 0 | Sorry - I'd like to give you points but there are no pictures - whatsoever! I know you have only done a draft so far. I would really like to see this story continue. I suggest putting in an animation of the coconut falling on fishers head. Then another picture of fisherism. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | I really loved it. I love the name. The only thing is that it is confusing. |
| Final Score: | 24 | Good start. Please continue. I would love to see where this goes. |
| Reviewer: | A random | |