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Epic Fail!

I really need to work out what would be the best way to end the article. Also, what do yew think of it so far? --~Fag x FS 12:25, 24 January 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	6	I'm likin' it! It's a good buildup, and you avoid letting it become repetitive, which is good, because things like this can easily slip into repetitiveness. I'd work on the intro, as it's a tad confusing (what exactly happened with the fridge?).
Concept:	8	Laughing derisively at the misfortunes of family and friends...excellent! The "Uncle Pete" section was strongest here, I thought. Perhaps you should rework the "Greg" section so its a little more like the "Uncle Pete" one in tone. Now I see that you've got "O Infiniban!" down at the bottom...perhaps you were going to do a section where you laugh at someone who's been infibanned? I'm beginning to get an idea for something you could do here...make the infiban section first, then the love when, then the uncle pete one, then the Greg one, and then perhaps one more equally nasty (killed in a fire, cat died, something like that, with some nice, derisive humor). Then you could end it with something totally inconsequential, like "Lost your car keys?" And in the section you could say "Oh, come on, I wouldn't make a joke out of something as horrible as THAT!" Just an idea.
Prose and formatting:	9	No problems heeya.
Images:	9	Good use of images, though the one of the guy with the fridge kind of scared me.
Miscellaneous:	8	Yeah, I like this. As for a suggestion for an ending, you see what I wrote up in the "concept" section, I think it would be a fairly good buildup. But the final decision is up to you, it's your baby :).
Final Score:	40	If you want any help with this, just let me know in my talk page.
Reviewer:	--THE 17:55, 25 January 2008 (UTC)