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Engelbert Humperdinck

Jimi C 17:04, 9 June 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	5	I'll break this down into sections. The lede: '4. The main problem with the lede is that it seems completely plausible. You've changed Humperdinck's last name from Dorsey to Patel, but I have no idea why. You've changed his breakout single from "Release Me" to "Bombtrack," but if that's a joke, I don't get it. And the idea that RATM would cover an Engelbert Humperdinck song is really not actually that far-fetched - "hardcore" bands actually cover bubblegum pop songs pretty often. The only thing here I can actually identify as a joke is the joke that RATM is a "polka/skiffle" number, and that's only slightly amusing and has nothing to do with Humperdinck. Early Years: 5. Okay, here I can identify jokes, but some of them need work. Throwing Popeye and Olive Oyl into an article about a real person in the real universe just isn't going to work. There's too much of that on Uncyclopedia - people introducing a cartoon character for no reason whatsoever ("Tori Amos is the lifetime companion of Scooby Doo"... meh.) The "biggest knickers in the land" stuff is kind of funny, but not exactly clever. I've found that juvenile humor works best when it's closely paired with sophisticated humor, and I'm not seeing anything particularly witty to balance it out. Career: 4. I'm not getting these jokes. I looked up "Chaka Demus," and I'm still not getting the joke. Is the joke that Demus and Humperdinck would have made an unlikely collaboration? The problem with that joke is that unlikely collaborations happen all the time in professional music - and sometimes they even work pretty well. The repetition on the "knickers" isn't hitting me right - it seems like an excuse to say "knickers" a bunch of times. Discography: 7. I thought this was going to be a lame list thing (and often I don't even bother to read those), but actually this was probably the funniest joke of the article - this idea that "Bombtrack" topped the charts for three years in about eight incarnations (a nice jab at radio audiences' total unwillingness to try new things) and that "Fuck the Pain Away" was such a pathetic song that its presence on any album would completely tank it. The question still lingers, though: what's the joke in calling it "Bombtrack"? Is it just me?
Concept:	5	It's a pretty standard Uncyclopedia concept: take a Wikipedia article, cut-and-paste it in, and then make it very silly. Unfortunately, it's an Uncyclopedia concept that's produced a lot of shit articles. It's usually better if there's some sort of running joke, some sort of theme... some kind of central funny concept that's peppered with minor jokes, instead of just a blank slate for minor jokes. Otherwise, things just get too random.
Prose and formatting:	5	The spelling and grammar are fine; the formatting is pretty standard. As a general rule, though, red links don't work the same way here as on Wikipedia. On Wikipedia, a red link means "there really should be an article about this; someone please write it." On Uncyclopedia, the only excuse for a red link is "I'm about to write this article." So unless you're about to write Bombtrack, polka, skiffle, the biggest knickers in the land, etc., those shouldn't be in red. Consider joke-links instead: for example, the biggest knickers in the land. The other problem with this article is that it's extremely short; it's barely above stub-length. It isn't done.
Images:	5	Honestly, Engelbert Humperdinck is already a pretty silly-looking guy. There's no reason to use his actual picture. Also, why would "few pictures exist" of a major pop star with a single that topped the charts more than half a dozen times? Jokes work better when they're consistent with one another.
Miscellaneous:	5	You know, I didn't intend to give this straight fives - it just happened that way.
Final Score:	25	Keep working on it. One thing I really like about this is the quality of the writing; it has a consistent encyclopedic tone and a good cadence to it. Anyone who can pull that off can write a very quality article, given enough work. Good luck!
Reviewer:	Hyperbole 03:03, 12 June 2008 (UTC)