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Bad puns

Eh... feeling a bit uninspired on this one. Help will be greatly appreciated. Thanks. -- 23:47, June 4, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	5	I love a good self-demonstrating article, though the last time I tried to self demonstrate, I got kicked out of the playground. Unfortunately, this article is too small. Bigger isn't always better, but you should've had more content to flesh out the concept, which I will get to later. Unfortunately, your text doesn't really have much bad puns, and the only humor I can derive from the article is from the images. Put the images in a separate section on visual puns, and expand on your concept. Maybe have a section on the history of bad puns? i.e "Puns have coexisted with bad puns for thousands of years. With the advent of language, man could create more complex puns instead of laughing at how similar one's grunt is to a wild boar." That was an awful example, but you get my point, right? In Romeo and Juliet, Mercutio once said, "Tomorrow, you will find me a grave man." before he died of a stab wound. Unfortunately, this article felt unfinished.
Concept:	7	I like the concept of your article, but you haven't exploited the article's full potential. The concept seems similar to the page "Pun", but, you could make it unique. My advice is to add more horrifically cringe worthy puns. How about a superhero who attacks villains with a tack? Or a psychologist who says that punching bags is a great outlet to let out your feelings? Or a fairy tale on puns that starts with, "Once a pun a time..."?
Prose and formatting:	7	In the first sentence of the section "Bad Visual Puns", change the comma to a colon or a period. In the next sentence of the same section, change 'literary' to 'literally', unless of course that was a pun, than carry on. Also you put a space between 'in' and 'describable'. Other than that, I think it's correct.
Images:	6	The images were very funny. The puns were wonderfully cringe worthy, and the footnote image made me laugh. Also, I loved the fig pun.
Miscellaneous:	5	My enjoyment of the article was cut short by how short it was (bad pun intended).
Final Score:	30	You have a great concept, and you're funny enough to finish the article, but you have to expand the article, or else it'll still feel incomplete.
Reviewer:	--User:CandidToaster/sig 00:37, June 5, 2011 (UTC)

This is my second pee review. I'm not very good, but you might find something useful.--User:CandidToaster/sig 00:37, June 5, 2011 (UTC)