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Poor Bison 03:49, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	2	Overall:2 This is more of a concept problem. You can't really make fun of a waterfall too much. I can see where you are going with alot of what you are writing, but it just doesn't work because of the topic. History:2 Way too random too be funny. It doesn't really even seem to make sense. The birth part was just a gay joke that turned into water, somehow, running and jumping off a cliff? It just didn't make sense. Even articles with a little randomness are weakened, a article based on randomness just fails. Maybe there is some humour to be found in the discovery and I just haven't done research though, even so, most readers won't get it. Other Information:1 The joke in the properties part, is water flows up to down. Maybe I am being too harsh, but this is just weak. There is nothing funny about this at all. As for the personality, you finally say it best, its just a waterfall.
Concept:	2	This concept is very, very weak. Maybe a waterfall isn't he best thing to poke fun at. If you do plan on making this work, you need to completely refocus what you are talking about. Because as far as I know, waterfall jokes have never worked, and I don't see them ever doing so. There are other concepts though that you should probably pursue before a waterfall one.
Prose and formatting:	7	Despite its lack of humour, it is well written. There seems to be no mispellings, and the formatting is excellent. The picutre fits well and the sections work well. So nice job on the actual writing part.
Images:	5	There is only one, most good articles have at least two or three. But the one you do have is kinda good I guess. It fits. But its a picture of a waterfall of a face, so its not gold but I guess its the funniest part.
Miscellaneous:	0	Improvability score, I do not see this getting any better just because of the topic.
Final Score:	16	Sorry it might be kinda harsh. But your a good writer, you just need to find a better topic. If you do want to fiz this, good luck to you.
Reviewer:	--Yodel monkey 18:51, 11 December 2008 (UTC)