UnScripts talk:Presidential Debates 2008 Transcript
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From Pee Review[edit source]
My second script. Tell me what you think. ~ 
Jacques Pirat, Esq. Converse : Benefactions : U.w.p.
22:38, 31 March 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | Some good funny, but I think the foundation would allow for more than whats here already. |
| Concept: | 7 | Funny spin on the upcoming political season. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | With such easily embellished characters, you really should broaden the dialog. The childish banter is funnier when mixed amongst more flourished language (Family Guy uses this concept constantly). I'd also bold the names as the appear, but other than that formatting is fine. |
| Images: | 8 | I love the ones that are there. Chop up a funny one of Stalin to balance it out, and I think it'll be set on that. Maybe one more after that if you really want to go all the way. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7 | Might not want to end as abruptly as it did, but not bad either way. |
| Final Score: | 34 | I think it needs a bit of work, but definitely a worthy Script which is already an enjoyable read. |
| Reviewer: | THINKER 03:08, 17 April 2007 (UTC) | |