UnNews talk:Syrup thieves caught
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| Humour: | 9 | I liked your jokes very much and, although the article is not long, there are too many of them for the reader not to get bored and too few for him to get tired.
The only thing I can say is that adding a source will be very good, as Hotadmin4u69 said: "If there is no source..." (I don't remember the rest). Anyway, you can look at hos talk page, I think it is there that he said it. Or maybe it is not the Hotadmin but someone else. But it doesn't matter. What you can add as a source is a real story which ,ight be conneted to the photos of these nude artists. And it may be even funnier if you find something connected to syrop amd post it as another source. |
| Concept: | 8 | I honestly think that it is one of the best UnNews I have ever read. You only have four paragraphs but it is still a complete and interesting story. You don't need to increase the volume of your article, unless you find another brilliant joke. The only thing which is not very clear is why did the thieves still the syrop: you say that they sold it to the celebrities in order to get their naked photos and put them on the Internet. But why? They seem not to gain anything from that. If you would add something to explain this (political conspiracy, rivalry between celebrities, anything you choose), it would be great. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8.5 | I didn't find any language mistakes and the writing style was well developed. I have only several remarks.
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| Images: | 7 | The image represents the maple syrop but the comment talks about police being hopeful about the charges. But these two do not really match. Or maybe I did not understand you well: maybe the police is hopeful that charges will stick because they love maple syrop so much? But something that is certain, is that you don't say anything about the police and their feelings in the article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8.1 | Your average score. |
| Final Score: | 40.6 | Normally, my reviews are longer but your article was not very long and you developed the conceptand the jokes well. I only had a few comments and I told all of them. Thank you for your funny article! |
| Reviewer: | Anton (talk) 14:06, 7 July 2013 (UTC) | |
Ekk...[edit source]
Is this the most Canadian thing ever? 
XY007 • talk • contributions 10:05, 29 April 2015 (UTC)