UnNews talk:England steadies itself for public drinking ban

Wanted to see what you whoever you are think. Are there any more ideas I can expand the story with. Thanks The Oblong Lobster 18:02, 9 June 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	7	The humo(u)r in the second half is great, especially starting with the "second-hand drinking" comment. Perhaps throw in comments about how some people are handling the spectre of the drinking ban or some other reasons for the ban being implemented.
Concept:	9	Good concept. Just take care of the above-mentioned idea.
Prose and formatting:	7	The article needs some fixing to make it like the UnNews articles. For example, get rid of the bold-typed first sentence. Also, within your quotation marks, use Italics (for the purpose of easier reading.)
Images:	4	I'm sorry, but the image just wasn't that funny to me. If you want to continue to use it, then make a funnier caption. (Also, I'm not really sure I fully understand the shelter's purpose here.) Otherwise, I would find a different image to better illustrate the article, one that fits within it very well.
Miscellaneous:	9	Gobbilty-Goo. That's about all I know to write here.
Final Score:	36	There is a very good idea here. However, what needs to be fixed is the humo(u)r in the first half and the use of pictures. That's about all I know to suggest.
Reviewer:	--Mr.Vib 00:15, 13 June 2007 (UTC)