Talk:The 28th Amendment

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From Pee Review

Ran out of ideas. Anything funny I can add? Can someone piss or jizz on my Peter North article please. If not, just make a pretensious denial face and say, "i don't know who peter north is!" --AmericanBastard 04:34, 3 January 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	6	Could use a little fleshing out, but there's some good jokes in there- the only problem is that most of the humour can be guessed from the title. Try extending it a bit to include somethign more unexpected.
Concept:	8	Really liked the idea, a nice bit of satire
Prose and formatting:	6	Could use a little tidying up, especially with regard to comma usage, but well paragraphed etc. (by the way, the word "delegating" in the first paragraph- do you possibly mean "dictating"?) Minor problems with grammar at a couple of points, but a quick proof-reading should get rid of those
Images:	8	Good, I liked to post-it note one.
Miscellaneous:	5	Needs a little more work but the groundwork is nice.
Final Score:	33	Would a section on the amendment's implementation be viable? Could be a productive area. Definitely a good start overall though.
Reviewer:	--Sir Jam 11:02, 3 January 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	7	Ha, this is great. I love the writing style and everything.
Concept:	7	Well, it's an obvious concept. Add a few 'unexpected twists', but otherwise keep at it in the same way and it shall succeed.
Prose and formatting:	6	With a bit of polishing (redlinks, categories etc.) and a bit more fleshing out it will be good.
Images:	6	The post-it note one is good, and I suppose the others do their job, but nothing special.
Miscellaneous:	0	N/A
Final Score:	26	Is good. To make VFH, though, I get the feeling some 'out of the box' stuff might be needed, as JT hinted.
Reviewer:	Hindleyite Converse • ?pedia 11:52, 3 January 2007 (UTC)