Talk:Kroger
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Hello and welcome! Thanks for making an article on Kroger: I see put a lot of efforts in it, but there are a few things that still need to be done. First of all, it would be good to have some illustrations: unfortunately, you cannot upload an image without having an account, so if you want to continue editing Uncyclopedia, it'll be easier for you to make one. It will also be easier for other editors, like me, to contact you that way.
Concerning the text, you have a solid beginning and an established humour strategy, which is very good; however, sometimes it feels like you don't develop the potential such a page has. As I presume from reading your article, is that you know a lot about Kroger (at least, enough to tell Uncyclopedia readers about it) and yet you are afraid to go into details, explaining it by the fact that the reader "shouldn't ask questions".
When it concerns things like 1984 or FBI, such a technique can work well, even though it has already been overused. When you are talking about a less well known subject, try actually telling the reader everything he needs to know about Kroger, with humour. For example, today is the first time I heard that name, due to my geo-position. So when you say that I shouldn't ask questions about "Kroger's Empire" or that it wants to take over the world, the joke, even if I see it, falls flat on me.
So what I suggest is try, for the beginning, to look at one aspect of the company you are writing about, such as its products, and see all the jokes you can make about them. Often, you can make a very good humour article just out of that. All in all, you have a very good potential, but I advise you to work on it, to make the page shine! Good luck with your first article! Anton (talk) 17:54, 30 December 2014 (UTC)