Talk:Halifax (dump)
From Pee Review[edit source]
OK, so it wasn't initially my article, but I'm the one who made it the length it is. Problem is, I still think it's crap, for reasons I'll go into if you want them. So I thought I'd get other opinions. One I might note though, is I know it could do with some images - it's just that I'm neither any good at making them, nor do I have the time to try to, or request any. Thanks. --scaley1234 23:40, 12 February 2007 (UTC).(I would review someone else's article, as per "It would be nice if you review someone else's article when you post yours. We do live in a civilised world after all", except I generally believe my sense of humour to be pretty crap (hence why I'm asking this here), so that'd be pointless).
- I added a map of the Halifax area. ----OEJ 17:33, 13 February 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks, like what you did with it :-).--scaley1234 17:04, 14 February 2007 (UTC).
| Humour: | 3 | They say humor is contextual; in this case, no one outside of Halifax will get this. |
| Concept: | 5 | It teeters on vanity. |
| Prose and formatting: | 2 | You used topics...badly. Use subtopics; they organize better. It's as if you went fishing for red links and put them in the article. |
| Images: | 3 | You have one poorly-placed image. It's a thumbnail for a reason; you can shrink it down! |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | I dislike chavs, so kudos on the occasional chav jabs. |
| Final Score: | 18 | Well, it's an improvement over what once was, buts it's still a bloody mess (and by that I mean sprayed with gore). Make it less specific humor-wise; people outside of Halifax read this, too! |
| Reviewer: | Sir Judgement F@H UmP VFH {talk} 06:00, 23 February 2007 (UTC) | |
- Thanks, I'll try to make it, err, "less specific", when I get the time (something I've been lacking recently). And images, like I said, aren't my strong point, but oh well. --scaley1234 21:46, 23 February 2007 (UTC).
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Needs a massive grammar and syntax overhaul...a little humour would be nice too.