Talk:Butler
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This is my first article and I was wondering if you could help. It seems to be missing something, but I'm not sure what. I think the article is good, but I'm sure that you won't. Please respond! --Jedravent 02:16, 11 December 2006 (UTC)
Yeah, it looks like you put this as your user page. You might want to cut and paste this onto a new article page. – Preceding unsigned comment added by Super90 (talk • contribs)
Okay, I moved it. --Jedravent 01:05, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
I think the angle you chose is great and it starts off very promising. I didn't think the little dialogue was too great and at the Butler family bit the article starts to drift off a bit IMHO. I really liked the 'getting into a household' part, but I think this bit should be followed up in the rest of the article by stuff like 'things to do when hired', 'serial butlering', 'how to avoid getting caught butlering', or somesuch. Multi-step schemes always seem to go down well and this one sure has a lot of potential. Good luck! Dutchy 12:45, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
I used your suggestions. Now the article's a lot better than it was before. --Jedravent 23:53, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
Thanks!--Jedravent