Talk:Bill Lawry
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From Pee Review[edit source]
Just wondering what you think. I tried to make it something most people will get, but Americans don't get cricket so if you are American don't judge too harshly. Feedback welcome on my discussion page as well. Thanks --Marto 85 04:18, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 7.5 | Yes! Lawry Breaks Windies! This is a well thought out and extremely funny (in my opinion) article. Don't worry - I'm Australian and do understand cricket. I have one problem with this article though - What's with the pigeons? I think you should take that little bit out and leave behind a pretty much brilliant article. |
Concept: | 8 | Nice. Poor Bill. How dare they tease him with his special nose technique. |
Prose and formatting: | 8 | No problems, except for maybe all the red links. |
Images: | 6 | Maybe images could be better. Most of them are simple photoshops with a patch over Bill's nose. Maybe you could spend a little time fixing it up. |
Miscellaneous: | 10 | I will try the corpse technique next time I play. |
Final Score: | 39.5 | Just what Uncyclopedia needs - a good, ridiculous article explaining cricket. Like Age of Umpires, you will go far. I think, with the red links and pigeons taken out, this is a winner. I'll nominate it myself, even. |
Reviewer: | Ikabu 09:10, 23 March 2007 (UTC) |
From Pee Review 2[edit source]
Just wondering what you think. Please review this. --Marto 85 06:23, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
Humour: | 5 | Made me smile at times but it isn't laugh out loud funny. |
Concept: | 5 | Cricket commentator with a big nose... Always going to have limited appeal but it could be better. |
Prose and formatting: | 7 | Reads well and well-structured without doing anything fancy |
Images: | 6 | Images and captions are OK but they're not fantastic. |
Miscellaneous: | 6 | Don't know what this is for. |
Final Score: | 29 | I may be being a bit harsh here; it's not a bad article. The gay lovers jokes annoyed me because they're so unoriginal and it just lacked any stand out section to really make you laugh |
Reviewer: | --Kelpan 16:23, 5 April 2007 (UTC) |