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UnNews: Studies reveal that weight-loss can be achieved with this one simple trick [edit source]
Would love some reviews of this article I just (like, literally in the last few minutes) wrote and uploaded.
Thanks, and heres a direct link: http://en.uncyclopedia.co/wiki/Studies_reveal_that_weight-loss_can_be_achieved_with_this_one_simple_trick.
Hankjones 14:10, December 11, 2011 (UTC)
| Humour: | 9 | It's great, and it's about f**ing time that stupid internet ad got its comeuppance. It's missing something, though. Can't put my finger on it. |
| Concept: | 10 | Again, I'm all for bashing stupid internet ads (especaially ones that are so widespread), and I only wished I had thought of it first. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | I think what it's missing, is that the prose needs to be tightened up, and some sub-headers put in. That would make the humour more punchy. |
| Images: | 7 | More images could help also. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | This is just my grading of the piece generally. |
| Final Score: | 43 | Overall, a great piece. Could use some tightening, but a real cracker of a concept. |
| Reviewer: | Phrank Psinatra 11:32, December 25, 2011 (UTC) | |