You know the drill. Tell me if it sucks. - UnIdiot | 
| Talk | Contribs - 19:27, Sep 9
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This article is under review by
<font-weight:bold>Gerry Cheevers.
Sayeth Gerry: shotgun!!
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8.5
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okay, quick review, here we go. i'll go as in-depth as i can given that it's an unnews (short) by unidiot (noted author, probably won't need much correction). but i assume too much; to the reviewmobile!
upon reading your article, i have decided to give you a list of good/bad things.
- good: almost everything. the references to pants-wearing or laundry, the pants being monogamist, the gold-plated door, the idea in general. you get much points for good.
- not so good: the following things weren't very effective, and might call for a modification. 'lord tide' is kind of vague, maybe you could come up with something closer to pontius pilate? 'panstianity' is kind of weird, i think they might call it something like 'the church of something-something'. why would mel gibson be replaced by a pair of jeans; he was the director, if you wanted to replace jesus with the jeans it should be jim caveziel. the comment 'kind of retarded' seemed out of place even for a comment from a local dimwit.
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| Concept:
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8
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a good unnews concept: the skewering of facts (paranoid religious nutjobs) and the crossover of worlds (a movie and an unrelated nunnery).
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| Prose and formatting:
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9
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your prose was sparkling, this will be the easiest proofread i've ever done. the second picture was rather large, but that's the only complaint i have.
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| Images:
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8
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two good images. good captions. i see the second one is a radx production, which may explain its big-ness.
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8.4
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averaged
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| Final Score:
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41.9
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my preview button tells me that your final score is 41.9. it seems this will probably be headed for VFH sometime in the immediate future. i'll leave you with some sweeping generalizations, rather than the nitpicky stuff in the humor section. you never really express why the sisterhood is upset; perhaps a description of one of the pants-sharing scenes or some other specific content that would offend them could be mentioned. what will be in the promotional film they request to add to the movie? what are the specifics of the Sisterhood dress code? that being said, great job, and good luck with this one!
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| Reviewer:
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SirGerrycheeversGunTalk 16:13, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
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- Thanks for the review, I made a few changes taking into consideration the points you made. - UnIdiot | | Talk | Contribs - 02:45, Sep 12
| Talk | Contribs - 19:27, Sep 9
