Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Things Hidden In Food
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Thanks for the help!
Things Hidden In Food[edit source]
Hmm, this is quite an extensive idea. I already included some good ideas. What do you guys think about it (maybe you can think of some other examples)? I hope it's eventually good enough for a VHF nomination ...
| Humour: | 5 | There are good sections (Prisons) and sections that need work (Fast Food). I would try and add more satire (plays on words, situations, etc.) and rely less on violence or violent acts to provide the "fun" because they which are themselves not funny, just violent. BTW, Body of Christ gets two major thumbs up, and could you give me extra pickle with that? |
| Concept: | 8 | The concept is good - but its almost too broad. For example, I really like the idea of exploring the whole "body" of Christ as part of the menu to the point where it could become a stand alone article on its own. Same for the Prison food section. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | You can clean up the sentences by removing a great deal of filler. Work on making the sentences tighter and flex your semi-colons for good measure. |
| Images: | 4 | The score on this is low because I found the number of images distracting. Its better to have one good image then lots of smaller images. I would also consider a rebus image (file+Pie=freedom) something like that for the conceptually impaired. The one image that doesn't work for me is Image:CornFlakes.PNG; I would really recommend that you send that over to the Reefer Desk and have Modus give it the once over. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | You've put a lot of good work into this, and a lot of sincere effort. I think that this article has legs and with a little bit of work will take you to VFH. |
| Final Score: | 33 | |
| Reviewer: | Dame  GUN PotY WotM 2xPotM 17xVFH VFP Poo PMS •YAP• 01:57, 17 May 2007 (UTC)
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Ah, sorry, I'm late with this ...
But I don't need any more pee.
I got some questions on your review - posted them on your discussion page some time ago ... Again, thanks!