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There, Iowa

I wrote this along with Cajek a while back ago, and I need some constructive criticism. What d'ya think?--Æ 13:26, 17 December 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	8.1945056	Quite a bit of humor contained within. I enjoy the plays off of "there," and the inherent ambiguity on the history.
Concept:	9.6546324	Good concept.
Prose and formatting:	8.0156572	There's some minor spelling errors, and the lack of links makes a wall of black text, which causes my eyes to glaze over like a delicious Krispy Kreme donut slipping sensuously off the line into a box, it and eleven of its companions awaiting my every move, and oh dear I believe I have salivated upon your review. I apologize.
Images:	9.4621792	Fine on images.
Miscellaneous:	7.3468342	Ah, the dreaded pi score. It comes into play because the article seems to end with an audible "plop," stopping without any sense of a resolution or conclusion. You bring us along and then leave us standing upon the cliff edge without a line delivering tasty, tasty crispy warm donuts fresh and hot and gooey and oh there I go again drooling over your review. I should probably eat something. Upped because of addition of ending. Hurrah, ending!
Final Score:	42.6738086	Most importantly, add a conclusion! Round out the article and lock it down like a Krispy Kreme locks its doors as I approach, fearing my unwhetted appetite overwhelming their machinery and sweeping through their stock like a plague of locust does through Egyptian newborns oh yes the review. Fix a few spelling errors and fancy up the formatting a smidge, and you're good.
Reviewer:	Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 23:17, 19 December 2007 (UTC) (modified Contestant CUN -- VFH NotM Buzz Ctrbs 00:08, 20 December 2007 (UTC))