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I've taken a lot of the suggestions made by Cajek and re-done the article. Can I get some more feedback? --– Preceding unsigned comment added by YourMotherHasMyUnderwear (talk • contribs)

Apparently, I reviewed this already. I don't remember the previous version, so I won't compare to whatever I already said. Next time, put the old review onto the talk page of whatever it is that got reviewed, that way you won't have to keep putting this up on pee review as RESUB or RERESUB or whatever. --  Le Cejak • <-> 13:01, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	8.4	Section by section, then averaged. Intro (5) It's only three sentences long AND it has a random statement about the 1960's...? If this section was a paragraph long and didn't mention the 1960's, the article would do better on VFH. Why? Because it would look a lot better. If the intro was a slightly funny paragraph, the article score would be about a 42. 1 How to Be a Journalist (9) Nice work there. I dig it. However, it isn't quite a "10". 2 Types of Journalists (8) This part of the article was especially good, however I won't go in depth on this analysis. First section: 10 (ha!). Second section: 7 (too short). Third section: 10 (woot!). Fourth section: 5 (what the hell? random). 3 Journalists Around the World (9.8) First section: 10 (Russian parody: great). Second section: 10 (American parody: perfect). Third section: 9 (Chinese parody: nearly perfect). Fourth section: 10 (Iraq parody: fantastic). This part also was reviewed section by section. 4 See Also (10) I like the mousetrap quality of that joke.
Concept:	10	you have a lot of room here to write using this topic!
Prose and formatting:	5	Please PLEASE get rid of every single link that isn't at the end of a sentence! In fact, get rid of ALL those damn links. Also, see my comments about the images. Add categories to your article, and the ending will look more like an ending. -2 for having no ending! bad "yourmotherhasmyunderwear" bad!!
Images:	6	I liked the images, but they are all squished into the end. Also, they look weird: different sizes, one is way the hell on the left... line them up all nice 'n pretty!
Miscellaneous:	7.4	avg of all the other scores.
Final Score:	36.8	The only advice I have is to fix the formatting and make it longer. If you did that, you might have a feature on your hands (more likely a quasi-feature). I liked this article alot. How do you make an article longer and feature worthy? Talk about journalists through history. Like, ancient Egypt and so forth. Get creative. Give a few examples of articles and people's reactions. Give an ending, please. It just ends with Iraqi journalists, which is not an ending at all. Give the ending an oomph: make it about journalists in the future! If you did those two things and had a longer intro, you would have about a 46/50, because that stuff takes a lot of work. Would it be worth it? YES. DO IT!
Reviewer:	Le Cejak • <-> 13:17, 4 November 2007 (UTC)