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Zombie Defense[edit source]
This article is being written by Sausagewaffles, but I've submit it to Pee Review for him. Anyways, please read through while keeping in mind that pictures and possibly more text are definitely pending. --FuzzMaster 16:54, 10 June 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 3 | Humour is the problem. You focus too much an actual practical advice for a situation I'm not ever going to worried about. |
| Concept: | 7 | Concept is good. There is a nice article here somewhere. |
| Prose and formatting: | 7 | Prose is fine. |
| Images: | 0 | For a long article, loooots of pictures please. We need graphical stimulation. |
| Miscellaneous: | 3 | Halve the size of the waffling overview...or make it funnier. Probably helpful to avoid 'I','my', etc, because that makes it sound amatuerish. Make the start your gold material to suck us into the article. |
| Final Score: | 20 | Waaay to much blah blah. Cut stuff that isn't funny(even if it would be in the 'real' guide.) Minimum of one joke per two sentences. Good luck with it. |
| Reviewer: | MaxMangel 13:57, 11 June 2007 (UTC) | |