Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnTunes:German Techno Music

My first UnTunes song. I know this isn't that good, but I'd like some feedback on it, since I'm thinking that making more UnTunes songs would be fun.

Mr.Soot Gremlin -Talk 03:09, October 7, 2011 (UTC)

Humour:	7	I kind of "get it" early on. I just wonder if there are other things to poke fun of, or more electronic beats/instruments you can program (I am assuming the music is 100% programmed) to make it a tad less monotonous (and yes, I do understand that monotony supposed to be part of the satire, but you can't bore us in reality).
Concept:	10	I get it. Great concept. Nice Kraftwerk groove going on.
Prose and formatting:	8	The written part was helpful, but unless there is something interesting for the reader, the lyrics may not be necessary, unless you get that part fixed up.
Images:	7	While images are not central to the piece, the one you provided ought to have been (in my view) less "German" and more "Techno Music".
Miscellaneous:	7	Again, great idea, but the approach is too simple to sustain a two and a half minute song. You need more to poke fun of.
Final Score:	39	Not bad, but needs work.
Reviewer:	Phrank Psinatra 11:58, December 25, 2011 (UTC)

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