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UnNews:The Obama Report[edit source]
I'm going to do more of these(Obama Reports) and I want to know what worked and what didn't. I also try to crack jokes at both Democrats and Republicans, so can you tell me if I did that okay. MercenarylordEnter if you dare 13:25, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | I got a few chuckles, but that was about it. The first section was probably the funniest. |
| Concept: | 5 | You don't actually seem to have much of a concept here. Your article sort of jumps all over the place. I think you should just pick a single subject for each article and try to develop it well. |
| Prose and formatting: | 4 | There were several punctuation issues, mainly when you put apostrophes in places where the shouldn't be (such as "critics'") and fail to put them where they should be (such as "cause"). You also had trouble with similarly spelled words, such as "then" and "than" |
| Images: | 10 | Good, good, definitely good enough for an UnNews article. |
| Miscellaneous: | 6 | Once again, you should just have a single, well-developed subject instead of multiple, underdeveloped subjects. |
| Final Score: | 32 | It was a good attempt, but you tried to do too much at once. If you try to do this again, stick to one, good story, and one, good theme for your jokes. |
| Reviewer: | Aethix ~ Talk|Contributions|My project  01:15, 13 April 2009 (UTC)
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- Thanks. I'll work on that. MercenarylordEnter if you dare 21:40, 13 April 2009 (UTC)