Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Michael steele
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Michael steele[edit source]
Thegovernmentkilledyourdog 19:28, 13 April 2009 (UTC)
| Humour: | 3 | Alright, since this is obviously your first article, i'll try to be nice. There are some major flaws here, and let me try to articulate them. The humor is not very subtle. I can tell by your writing that you're a liberal, and there's nothing wrong with that, but it took me all of 3 seconds to figure out the joke. If you're gonna make fun of someone as well known as Michael Steele, you're gonna need a few more punchlines and some originality. |
| Concept: | 6 | Alirght, every American political junkie such as myself knows who Michael Steele is, so there's no huge flaws here. |
| Prose and formatting: | 2.8 | One major rule of Uncyclopedia: with a very small amount of exceptions, lists are *not* funny. You're supposed to insert the various ideas that are typically in lists in the form of paragraphs. Also, you get somewhat redundant with "change" at the beginning of each idea. |
| Images: | 5 | They're not phenominal, but actually pretty adequete. Probably the best part of the article, they fit it to what you're trying to do well. However, that Steele image needs a more realistic gun, and in the pimping image, the guy kind of looks more like a Ninja. |
| Miscellaneous: | 3 | Overall grade of the article. |
| Final Score: | 19.8 | It's your first shot at Uncyclopedia, and good for a first try. But as a regular article, it is severely lacking. Now, for some constructiveness: first off, if you plan on making an article, don't just slap it together in 5 minutes. Make your article in userspace, under User:Thegovernmentkilledyourdog/Michael steele. Before submitting this to Pee Review again, spend some time on it there. Mainspace articles get deleted in a week, but in userspace, you have as much time as you need. Spend some more time on it, make photoshopped images a bit more credible, and turn your list into a few paragraphs and headers. It's good for a first attempt, but you need MUCH more. Good luck, and don't give up! =) |
| Reviewer: | Saberwolf116 21:43, 13 April 2009 (UTC) | |