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86.27.177.38 15:51, 9 November 2008 (UTC) I will do this...--I like cheese 16:41, 12 November 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	1.7	First section-3 Urgh.. The first sentance wasn't terrible but still it sounds like some guy has got really fed up with his home town and decided to make a page about it. One trouble is that s not funny. What I would do- Make it sound like you're absolutly right-wing/daily mail reader which is what you're doing at the moment, but not nearly enough. See BNP, which will help except be that right wing. Geography- 0 One Line? Either think of more content or get rid of it. Something about is surrounded by asylem-seekers camps and other 'undesirables'. Culture 2- same critisism as first section Transport- 3 Started very well but at the third sentance it just got boring. Granted, it's not random, but is is worse; just boring. List- 0.5 Lists are devilish. Especially Boring lists. Heck, even if yo'd included ton of in-jokes (don't though) it would of been funnier. Though, I did like Stings entry. If you think I'm being harsh, I think I'm being pretty fair actually.
Concept:	3.5	The idea of being really right-wing has been tried and tested and I would of given you hgher, but often you just fizzled out and said straght facts. Possibly you may of misinterpreted the meaning of being Funny and Not just stupid.
Prose and formatting:	5	Acceptable spelling and grammer, but appaling Layout- A list, No intro, one entry only 1 page. I've put your first section as intro, but I'll leave you to it.
Images:	0	n/a Come on you have loads of scope for this. A picture of a foreign person, maybe. (With a caption of something like 'Grrr! BloodyImmagrants! He wants to take our jobs, murder our children and errr.. take our jobs.)
Miscellaneous:	1	* Far too many red links- get rid of them. I live in Britain and I've got no clue who some of these people are.
Final Score:	11.2	Sorry, but this teeters into VFD. I'm going to put in there and if it survives it's gunna need a serious rewrite
Reviewer:	--I like cheese 17:21, 12 November 2008 (UTC)