Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Chatroulette
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Chatroulette[edit source]
Gee... a review on a POTR article - what a surprise! Puppy Sunday, 07:20, Mar 21 2010 UTC
- Doing the review now, expect it to be done within a few hours 03:59, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
| Humour: | 7 | I have to say this first: I am jealous of your skills at HTML; the best I can do is bold and italicize text; you should probably stop going to Uncyclopedia and get a job designing web pages, if you haven't already. This article is short, but I know this was intended: the main attraction was the chatroulette "slideshow", which was supposed to simulate a normal visit to chatroullette, by parodying normal site's user's infatuation with female mammary organs: I found the picture's humorous, though there should have been more. The actual article itself is funny enough: the jokes are nicely subtle (compared to other user's more blunt ramblings on certain peoples' prehensile structures). What I found especially funny was the jokes about masturbation (extra points for pulling a masturbation joke off without delving into gratuitous vulgarity), and the sarcastic joke near the end about the site's lack of 'proper' moderation. I loved the subtlety of your jokes. You lost a few points due to the article being too short; you went into an interesting direction but the article was too short to really go anywhere. |
| Concept: | 9. | You imitated the look of chatroullette perfectly, while still retaining the article format. you should get an award, or something. It was ingenious to make an article on chatroullete, while making the article look like the actual site. Though other articles have a similar format, your article is one of the few to pull it off extremely well. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | You mimicked the look of the site you were parodying decently, though I do have one suggestion: how about making a chat box like the one on the site, and putting the article on the bottom (and adding an option to show or hide said article)? Everytime you type something, your "partner" could always responds by typing "PENIS JOKE LOL", "PENIS PENIS PENIS", and "The vulgarity of the word penis, though, usually only used as 'random' humor, if overused, may be a parody unto itself, and be funny as a subtle form of meta-humor, oh, and PENIS". Just saying. Grammar was good, but I did find one offending sentence: "The website requires users to be at least 21 18 16 old enough to be able to click on a mouse button, and prohibits pornographic behaviour." The sentence is grammatically correct, but the flow of the words seem awkward. |
| Images: | 7 | The images are okay, though there isn't alot of humor in them. Other than the mismatched male and female bodies, and the 'boobies' joke, there wasn't really anything humorous in the images. Plus, there wasn't enough images, after clicking the next button five times, it looped back. More images=more jokes, so add more images. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | My overall enjoyment of this article. |
| Final Score: | 39 | My advice: expand on the main article, while still keeping the main theme: the overabundance of masturbating users, and add more images. The slideshow is the main attraction, so add more decorations. Chatroullete is ripe for humor, and you're in the right direction. You did miss one thing: why didn't you even note the massive amount of stranger's dicks you see? Every other time I clicked next, I saw a freakin' dick! |
| Reviewer: | -- 04:56, March 22, 2010 (UTC) my article is on VFH! I am whoring my article on your pee review, how sad. | |