Talk:I'd like to talk to you about Jesus

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Skinfan13's somewhat unsolicited opinion of your article...[edit]

Humour: 8 Alright, pretty funny piece. I thought when I first started reading this article that it would be just another dumb satire of religion, but you did a really nice job making this unexpected and funny. What I liked: the nonsequiters throughout, especially the subject heading choice. I'm a Christian, but I do find this to be a funny lighthearted critique of the "religious right" mindset. I especially liked linking the cape section to the picture and other religions' figureheads. What I liked the most though was in your introduction, where you make fun of the Southern Baptist Convention paintings of Jesus that make him stereotypically white. Jesus was in fact olive-skinned, as where his contemporaries, and those pictures always bothered me. There were a few things I didn't like as much, but I'll address those under concept, mostly because they fit better there.
Concept: 7 Good job, parodying the religious right in an off-beat manner. I'll focus more on what disappointed me here than anything else though. First, you never really explained how it was that Jesus came up with the concept of zero, no mention of it at all. I think you need to at least mention it. Secondly, the "sympathy for the devil" bit is great, but instead of making Jesus' nickname "the devil" you should probably make the song actually about sympathy for the devil as Jesus attacks him, or something. I think something along those lines would work a lot better than what you have. Still, reads enjoyably and is a fairly unexpected take on the fundies, so, good job.
Prose and formatting: 7 Not much to complain about here, except for the very short length of the article and your sections. I feel as though it could be expanded more, but its still fairly good the way it is.
Images: 8 I love the cape picture! I also like how smoothly it fits in with the rest of the article. The other images are fairly commonplace, but that's alright as they supplement the article pretty well. The captions are also good to go.
Miscellaneous: 8 Unexpectedly good, my hat is off to you sir. A little short, but that might not be such a bad thing. Overall, pretty fun to read.
Final Score: 38 A good article, unexpected form, all around great.
Reviewer: -- Sf13 Upsilonsigmasigmacrest.PNG 1845 EST 6 FEB 2011