Talk:Drifting

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first article, just wanted some feed back to help improve this article and all future articles i write

Humour:	6	That's not to say there isn't some funny stuff - there is. It's just not very funny, so being rather spaced out it tends to become buried quite a bit.
Concept:	6	I don't know how much you can really do with an article on drifting, anyway, so I commend you on what you managed. Might've been better as a how to article, though.
Prose and formatting:	7	Well, there were lots of mistakes, but they're virtually gone now (OOooh), so it's irrelevant. Article is well formatted and clean, if a little heading-heavy. Prose is rather simple but still good.
Images:	10	Not applicable - although with an article of this length, if any images were suitable they'd be welcomed.
Miscellaneous:	4	Here's the thing: half the time, this article reads like an actual article on drifting with a slightly witty edge. It probably seems to you like you simplified all the car and driving terms enough, but it still seems almost "technical" at parts - and sadly, that just isn't really funny to anyone.
Final Score:	33	I like the article, though, I think it has potential: my overall advice would be to cut back on the "technical terms" (actual drifting advice), merge some of the subsections, and perhaps take some jokes in a vein other than driving-related racism (which is funny, I admit) and basic humour.
Reviewer:	Feebas factor 03:07, 30 May 2007 (UTC)